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JYC: Round 4, Page 1

Published: Jun 15, 2011

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| | Audition | | Round 1 | | Round 2 | | Round 3 | | Next | |

| | ~VampireReyn's round | |

For round 4, we have Dusty the klepto versus Reyn the vampire at a carnival. Hilarity ensues.

This is the first time I've inked a comic by hand in a long, long time. The scan wasn't great but I used a photocopy filter on the line art. It's crunchy but in a way I like for a comic set in a junkyard. Purposeful crunchy, not crappy scanner crunchy.

I know I said I'd do a trashy twist for every round but I need to learn how to color with channels. Job skills triumph stylistic twists for giggles.

Since I am trying to learn a new technical skill, I would love critiques. It'd be amazing if someone who colored with channels critiqued me but I like hearing from anyone who can vocalize what they do and don't like.

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2431x1651px 1.67 MB

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HP pstc5100

Date Taken

Jun 13, 2011, 11:10:22 PM

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ThirdPotato

Jun 16, 2011

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I know you wanted more a critique on your methods and coloring, but I'm afraid I don't color in channels. The coloring, however, looks great. I agree with you about that rugged grungy feel with the lineart and style. It all works really well, I think. Perhaps try working in some lighter values though. When you squint, there's a lot of mid-darks, and darks, but not a lot of lights, mid-lights or midtones going on. Turn this into greyscale for a second and see if you agree though. Try to pull out a focal point in panel1 with a bit more contrast if you could.

As for the panel layout, I'm afraid I really don't get what I'm supposed to read first. There's a lot going on and this almost reads as an illustration than a comic page. Visually, there's nothing in the composition to tell me what panel to read next or even where to start. I'm not usually a fan of a character sandwhiched in panels unless its for a good story telling reason. So perhaps work on your storytelling by considering panel layout, panel composition, page composition, and using continuity and eye direction to lead your reader into the next appropriate panel.

That being said, yoru style and expressions are fantastic!